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    [Pre-Reboot] ✖ Swordsman CM Submission



    Swordsman Custom Moves Submission
    Swordsman Custom Moves includes any techniques related to swords. If you have the required fighting profession, use the template below to submit your personal swordsman move. Understand that if the submissions don't follow the rubric present within the Custom Submission Rules thread, they are subjected to being declined.

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    [B]Name:[/B]
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    [B]Weapon:[/B] 
    [B]Type:[/B] 
    [B]Rank:[/B] 
    [B]Range:[/B]
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    [B]Damage Magnitude:[/B]
    [B]Description:[/B]
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    Vortex Destruction
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    Declined. First and foremost, stop straying away from the template. Secondly, what is a vortex of slashes? You need to explain this better.

    Whirl Shock
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    Declined. Template. Outside of that its not bad. But I would advise that if you are going to be stating stuff like gathering power in their arms then you start including Ichi or Ni Gorilla into your techniques as a requirement to use before hand.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Rihan View Post
    Vortex Destruction
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    Declined. First and foremost, stop straying away from the template. Secondly, what is a vortex of slashes? You need to explain this better.

    Whirl Shock
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    Declined. Template. Outside of that its not bad. But I would advise that if you are going to be stating stuff like gathering power in their arms then you start including Ichi or Ni Gorilla into your techniques as a requirement to use before hand.


    Name: Vortex Destruction
    Style: Ittoryu
    Weapon: SWord
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short- Mid
    Experience Required: 70
    Damage Magnitude:5
    Description: The user sheaths their sword and when the user gathers strength into their dominant hand and once the user is ready he will unsheathe the sword very fast and swings his sword 6 times into the air opening a circular sphere of air that condenses itself into a vortex filled with the 6 slices. Think of medium size sphere that is made of air with 6 slices inside so that if anyone were to touch the technique they would be slice and then pushed away. This is a vortex Destruction.Creating a vortex of 6 slashes that can be used to attack an enemy with 6 slashes at once. This technique purposes can range from using is for attack for like using it in front of enemies and waiting until they walk into the technique weakling them severely since they couldn't dodge all 6 slices at once. The technique can also be used defensive by the user making the desired location around them so that all the slices at around making them able to block technique coming towards the user while not damaging the user unless the technique is stronger.
    Note: This technique can only be performed twice per battle.
    Note: The Vortex can be place in multiple position.

    X Declined. What is a vortex of slashes? Like, how is this physical (even in the One Piece World) possible? Why not just make a vortex if nobody has the technique?

    Name:Whirl Shock
    Style: Mutoryu
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: A
    Rank: Offensive/Defensive
    Range: Short - Long
    Experience Required: 70
    Damage Magnitude: 5
    Description:The user uses Ni Gorilla beforehand and then gather a enormous amount of strength in both of their arms, and once they've gathered enough power they puts their arms in front of them and in a quick motion they rotate them into a circle until their arms touch each other. As the wind begins to spin at fast rates until it form a circle shield that is capable of cutting anything with it's fast wind speeds. The Whirl Shock is capable of being use for defending by forming the shield in front of the user and as the technique comes in contact with the technique it will and bounce it back at the enemy since the wind speed are capable of deflecting things back at the enemy. Whirl Shock can also be used as a offensive by slinging the technique towards on the ground and as it roll towards the enemy.

    Note: Must use Ni Gorilla beforehand.
    Note: Can only block Alpha and below rank technique.
    Note: This technique can only be performed twice per battle.


    ✓ Approved. Edits Made. Train in TL and add to MS and bio.

    Name: Spiral Wave
    Style: Ittoryu
    Weapon: SWord
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: A
    Range: Short- Long
    Experience Required: 70
    Damage Magnitude:5
    Description: After the user uses Ni Gorilla on both their right arm left arm, they gather a great amount of strength until their arm beings to be unable to handle the power in their arms. After the right amount of strength is reached in their arms the user will then grab the hilt of their sword and after focusing on their enemy to read their body language, the user then swings both their swords in 360 angle and as the 360 angle is about to be complete the user releases all the power in both their arms through the sword sending a compressed spiral wave that will spiral from the center being the user body and go out in a long circle spiral that makes it hard to counter since the spiral begins to form right after the sword are almost done in the 360 motion. And what most people what understand about this technique is the Spiral Wave is actual two waves in the technique and without a accuracy higher then 20 they will only see one spiral.
    Note: Must use Ni Gorilla beforehand
    Note: Needs a accuracy of 20 to see the second spiral.
    Note: Can only be used twice per battle.



    ○ Pending. Clear up the description please. Make a way logically explaining how there is a second spiral wave. Contact me, after you edit this technique and I'll approve or decline based on the edit.
    Last edited by MantoraSama; Oct 18th '14 at 02:42 PM.

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    Name:Ogame Ryu: Pillar of Fire
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Close
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description: In this technique the swordsman holds the sword over their head in their right hand with the tip pointed down so the blade is vertical and splitting their face. Their left hand is held horizonatally over their head with the fist bisecting the right elbow. They then flick the sword up while at the same time flicking their left hand up so both the sword and their left hand are now pointing up, and then they will bring the sword down in a whipping motion putting the full force of the attack in the tip of the blade. They use their entire body by dropping to the ground and bringing the left arm down as well to create as much power as possible.

    Name:Ogame Ryu: Imperial Wrath
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Close
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description: In this technique the swordsman stands with their left foot forward and knees slightly bent. They hold their sword over their right shoulder with their left forearm horizontal across their chest and their right forearm vertical at their side and their hands gripped on the sword just at their shoulder. The swordsman then steps forward and begins to swing the sword in a straight vertical motion. The obvious defense to this is to meet the sword high as it comes down. But as the swordsman swings down they quickly switch their hand position so the blade deviates to the left before continuing downward, creating an S-shaped attack. The quick movement allows the swordsman to move their blade around the target's defense and hit them.

    Name:Ogame Ryu: Rushing Rapids, Cascading Waterfall
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type:Offensive
    Rank: D
    Range:close
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description:In this technique the swordsman holds the sword with both hands, one hand holding just under the hand guard and the other one gripping the bottom of the hilt. They then preform a vertical downward slash. As they swing down they release the sword with their forward hand and push forward with their hand holding the bottom of the hilt. This turns the downward slash into a forward thrust that extends the range of the attack. They then twist their arm holding the sword and continue the slash downward.

    Name:Ogame Ryu: Ripples that Change the World
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon:Sword
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Close
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description: With this technique the swordsman begins by holding the sword straight outward towards the target. They will then circle the sword around to their right and back above and behind their head ending with the sword being held horizontally back over the left shoulder so that the blade is completely hidden to the opponent. Then in a quick acceleration they swing the sword vertically downward with only the left hand on the grip. As the sword is moving down they then grab the hand guard with their right hand and push across turning the vertical strike into a horizontal strike while accelerating it even further.

    ✓ All Approved. Train in TL and add to MS and bio.
    Last edited by MantoraSama; Oct 18th '14 at 02:42 PM.

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    Name:Ogame Ryu: Boulder Eater
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Close
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description:This technique is used to both block an incoming attack and open an enemy's defenses. When faced with an incoming attack the user will position their blade to completely stop the attack. Rather than deflecting it, its positioned so the blades/weapons reach a stalemate and become locked. At this point the user takes a step forward while twisting their blade, pushing their opponent off balance and to the ground while also disarming them of their weapon. This leaves them wide open to a follow up attack. The user, if capable, can channel earth chakra through their blade to increase its defensive capabilities. This technique is only useful against other physical attacks such as kenjutsu or taijutsu.

    X Declined. What is chakra? O_O Tsk tsk tsk, I know where this came from.

    Name:Ogame Ryu: Shadow Stitch
    Style:One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Close
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description:With this technique the swordsman rotates their body to narrowly avoid an incoming attack while simultaneously stepping forward to close the distance to their opponent. By doing this they move into extremely close range while the opponent over extends themselves, creating an opening for attack while the opponent is incapable of defending themselves. This can only be used to avoid certain techniques such as other kenjutsu or taijutsu

    ✓ Approved. Train in TL and add to MS and bio.

    Name:Ogame Ryu: Purple Lightning
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Mid
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description:In this technique the swordsman will stand sideways and crouch down with their right shoulder tilted down. They will hold their sword with both hands vertically in front of the back shoulder and behind the head. They will then release their strength and throw their body towards the ground, appearing to fall. The hard fall will create speed which is then shot forward by using all of their strength to push off their back foot to create acceleration. This sudden burst of speed catches the opponent off guard as they're not expecting a lazy fall to turn into an extremely fast movement. The swordsman then finishes with and upward slash across the target's torso.

    This technique, when used Briefly increases the users speed by +10 due to the acceleration

    X Declined. D-Rank techniques can't give such a boost. Pretty much all D-Rank techniques don't give boosts unless its special in some form or fashion such as Gyojin Arts for example
    Last edited by MantoraSama; Oct 25th '14 at 01:44 PM.

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    Name: Geschicklichkeit | Dexterity
    Style: Ittoryu/Nittoryu
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Offense/Supplementary
    Rank: B
    Range: Self
    Experience Required: 50
    Damage Magnitude: N/A
    Description: The technique is based on the infamous drunken fist style. The user of the technique would either act as if he is drunk or actually be drunk when fighting an opponent. This does not only give the user an 'unpredictable' aspect to his movements and attacks, but it also allows him to perform 'tight' and awkward maneuvers with relative ease. Furthermore, the drunk-like state is accompanied with sudden bursts of power and speed, this is accomplished by focusing the majority of one's power into either the upper body or lower body, thus allowing an increase in effectivity. The reason the increase occurs is due to the user 'removing the limiter' on his power, or rather on his emotion. His emotion which subconsciously detests inflicting damage thus lowering the user's damage output. The drunk-like state removes that emotion or surprises it temporarily.
    Note: -10 ACC to opponent within Very Close - Short Range
    Note: Power bursts grant +1 DMG.
    Note: Speed bursts grant +10 SPD.
    Note: Lasts 3 turns.
    Note: Usable 3x per battle.


    Declined. After talking with another, decided that you should keep the G Ranked technique as you have it or submit this as a Z Ranked technique with an ACC penalty to yourself as well, you won't be as accurate as you are.
    Last edited by Oraan; Nov 1st '14 at 05:17 PM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Syndra View Post
    Name:Ogame Ryu: Boulder Eater
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Close
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description:This technique is used to both block an incoming attack and open an enemy's defenses. When faced with an incoming attack the user will position their blade to completely stop the attack. Rather than deflecting it, its positioned so the blades/weapons reach a stalemate and become locked. At this point the user takes a step forward while twisting their blade, pushing their opponent off balance and to the ground while also disarming them of their weapon. This leaves them wide open to a follow up attack. The user, if capable, can channel earth chakra through their blade to increase its defensive capabilities. This technique is only useful against other physical attacks such as kenjutsu or taijutsu.

    X Declined. What is chakra? O_O Tsk tsk tsk, I know where this came from.

    Name:Ogame Ryu: Shadow Stitch
    Style:One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Close
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description:With this technique the swordsman rotates their body to narrowly avoid an incoming attack while simultaneously stepping forward to close the distance to their opponent. By doing this they move into extremely close range while the opponent over extends themselves, creating an opening for attack while the opponent is incapable of defending themselves. This can only be used to avoid certain techniques such as other kenjutsu or taijutsu

    ✓ Approved. Train in TL and add to MS and bio.

    Name:Ogame Ryu: Purple Lightning
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Mid
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description:In this technique the swordsman will stand sideways and crouch down with their right shoulder tilted down. They will hold their sword with both hands vertically in front of the back shoulder and behind the head. They will then release their strength and throw their body towards the ground, appearing to fall. The hard fall will create speed which is then shot forward by using all of their strength to push off their back foot to create acceleration. This sudden burst of speed catches the opponent off guard as they're not expecting a lazy fall to turn into an extremely fast movement. The swordsman then finishes with and upward slash across the target's torso.

    This technique, when used Briefly increases the users speed by +10 due to the acceleration

    X Declined. D-Rank techniques can't give such a boost. Pretty much all D-Rank techniques don't give boosts unless its special in some form or fashion such as Gyojin Arts for example
    Name:Ogame Ryu: Boulder Eater
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Defensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Close
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description:This technique is used to both block an incoming attack and open an enemy's defenses. When faced with an incoming attack the user will position their blade to completely stop the attack. Rather than deflecting it, its positioned so the blades/weapons reach a stalemate and become locked. At this point the user takes a step forward while twisting their blade, pushing their opponent off balance and to the ground while also disarming them of their weapon. This leaves them wide open to a follow up attack. This technique is only useful against other physical attacks such as kenjutsu or taijutsu.

    Declined. The issue that I have with this technique is its lack of restrictions. You are aware that you cannot disarm someone without STR being in play.


    Name:Ogame Ryu: Purple Lightning
    Style: One Sword Style
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: D
    Range:Mid
    Experience Required:10
    Damage Magnitude:2
    Description:In this technique the swordsman will stand sideways and crouch down with their right shoulder tilted down. They will hold their sword with both hands vertically in front of the back shoulder and behind the head. They will then release their strength and throw their body towards the ground, appearing to fall. The hard fall will create speed which is then shot forward by using all of their strength to push off their back foot to create acceleration. This sudden burst of speed catches the opponent off guard as they're not expecting a lazy fall to turn into an extremely fast movement. The swordsman then finishes with and upward slash across the target's torso.


    Removed the chakra thing and the speed boost, ill re add thge speed boost when i rank it up.

    Declined, Do Not Resubmit. This technique actually already exists. It is a custom that belongs to another.
    Last edited by Oraan; Nov 1st '14 at 05:21 PM.

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    Name: Breaking Point
    Style: One Sword
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Weapon Breaking / Attack
    Rank: A
    Range: Very Close - Short
    Experience Required: 70
    Damage Magnitude: 2.5 DMG + 45 DP
    Description:
    Hanfeng performs a strong slash at the opponents weapon/armor. This technique is meant to break weapons more than it is to cause damage to an opponent.
    Note: Can only be used 2 times a Battle

    Approved. Well done. Train in your TL and add it to your Move set. Subtracted 70 XP from your total.
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    Name: Katsujinken
    Style: General Swordsmanship
    Weapon: Any number of swords.
    Type: Supplementary
    Rank: A
    Range: Self
    Experience Required: 70
    Damage Magnitude:s +1 DMG to Freeform and Very Close - Close Range Techniques.
    Description:Most swordsmen practice swordsmanship with a fundamental philosophy of "Satsujinken", which means "The Life-Taking Sword." Satsujinken is the practice of seeing a sword as a weapon, and as a tool with which one deals harm to others. Satsujinken takes its pinnacle form in the aptly named "Power of Destruction"; to those who practice Satsujinken, the sword is an instrument of destruction and death. However, as with most philosophies, it has its opposite. Katsujinken means "The Life-Giving Sword"; and is seemingly only practiced by students of the deceased Yoshida Shouyo. They see the way of the sword not as a means of killing, even if at times it must be used for such. They see the way of the sword as a manner of protection. "From here on, wield the sword not to strike down enemies, but to strike down your own weak self. Wield it not to protect yourself, but to protect your own soul." The goal is to strike down one's own weaknesses, and promote growth. To grow strong enough to protect those and that which are important to the swordsman. Practitioners of Katsujinken abandon Satsujinken, and all that comes with it. They become incapable of channeling the Power of Destruction. They become incapable of launching air-based shockwaves. But, something about their swordsmanship seems all the fiercer....
    Note: Can only be activated 2x per battle.
    Note: Lasts for 4 turns
    Note:Grants +1 DMG to Sword-based Freeform, and also +1 DMG to any Sword-based technique that strikes at Close or Very-Close range.
    Note:The user forfeits the ability to use any Air-based shockwaves (such as Yakkodori or Strongest Slash in the World, or those granted by STR feats), and also cannot use any Power of Destruction.

    Declined. User request
    Last edited by Oraan; Nov 2nd '14 at 05:30 AM.

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    Name: SilverFlame
    Style: One Sword
    Weapon: Sword
    Type: Defense / Attack
    Rank: D
    Range: Short- Long Range
    Experience Required: 10
    Damage Magnitude: 2
    Description: The technique is called SilverFlame, the technique is formed around the users sword and the ability to focus on the center of the enemies technique. The user will hold their sword in front of them, and once focusing on the center of the technique where it is most weak the user will slice the technique vertically in the center. Once the user slices the technique he will use the strength of the technique against the user and send it back towards them but in 5 smaller compressed slices towards the enemy.




    -Declined-

    The returning of attacks is far too much for it's rank and you didn't specify the dmg it returns and no it can't be full damage and use a spoiler next time. and change the name of the technique. I asked you a LONG time ago to stop making FSJ related stuff because my entire crew is doing it. there is even a HanFeng in my crew with the Silver flame as a sword. I mean come on. And put up your Faction bar.
    Last edited by Oraan; Nov 9th '14 at 05:08 PM.

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